You know... it sounds like you've got it all you figured out. Why don't you go write it?
The way I see it, the author of this piece wrote a perfect story. It had connection, it had action, it had romance, and it was a damn good read.
Any time someone shows up and the best thing they can say about a story is "it was okay, but I would have liked it better if you did it my way" or demands to have their story written for free (as in who are you, why are you, what do I owe you) that just comes across as disrespectful and a little bit self-centered.
Not that I imagine that was your intention. Just saying.
Re: Love it, but..........
The way I see it, the author of this piece wrote a perfect story. It had connection, it had action, it had romance, and it was a damn good read.
Any time someone shows up and the best thing they can say about a story is "it was okay, but I would have liked it better if you did it my way" or demands to have their story written for free (as in who are you, why are you, what do I owe you) that just comes across as disrespectful and a little bit self-centered.
Not that I imagine that was your intention. Just saying.
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